PERSPECTIVE
This week we are allowed to choose what topic we write about as long as it pertains to the work that we have within this writing course. Since most of our work is learning to write persuasive essays, I thought about the paper reviews and grades that my essays have been getting. I was amazed at how different people reacted so differently to my papers. One essay topic that I had written about was choosing whether or not the general public should ban guns. I remember one review that I got said that it was a 'well written' essay, and that I had 'clearly done my research'. Although they gave me a few suggestions to change some things within the text, they were astounded by my paper saying that 'it made me think, of things I never thought about before, and about the importance of the topic. I had never really thought much about this topic before, and I made me want find out more.' After hearing these words, I was pretty excited to show more people this paper. But the excitement seemed to have stopped when I showed it to someone who's opinion blew me out of the water. Finding many phrases that were not liked and various other ideas, they thought that the paper was bad and that I should rewrite it and look more into it. Although I was wanting to look it over again, it was time to turn in my seemingly horrible paper, and I had no time to change anything. Reluctantly I turned it in hoping that my teacher thought like the first person I reviewed the essay with. But maybe not. I could see my grade slipping more and more, and I could do nothing about it. But then it made me think about how different people can be, and how a perspective can change a world of ideas. Thats what makes this world fun and chalenging!
Wednesday, October 18, 2006
Tuesday, October 10, 2006
Journal 8
This week in journal write, we had to read an article from a newspaper and write about it, then compare it to previous articles that we have read in class.
Today I decided to read the Daily Herald and because of my profession, I decided to take a look at the health and fitness section of the paper. The article that caught my eye was about a research that had started in the 1960s. It was about the total consumption of salt intake which americans take daily and it was advising "It's not that salt is horrible and salt kills," they said. "A little bit of salt makes food better, makes life better. But people have to recognize that in large amounts, salt can have damage."
In the research it showed how by watching your salt intake and eating out less, not only will you save money, but your chance of having a heart attack or stroke could be decreased up to twenty-three percent! In my family, we have a high risk for heart attacks from both sides of my family. So I took this article personally. I actually eat out a lot, and one of the things that they advised was to eat at restrauants less and eat homemade meals more often. I really love salt, and I now know that I should start changing my diet, or at least the types of foods I eat and how much salt I take in. I think that this writer did a great job at convincing me to watch my intake.
This writer did an awesome job. Which is probably why they are in the Daily Herald. Comparing to the other articles that I read, I was more personally related to the salt precaution article. But as for the style of writing, I think that this writer was more laid back and instead of strongly stating their opinion, this writer just informed the reader and advised them not to intake as much salt. The two articles were organized well and very well written. I think that this article was meant to provoke thought and give information to help more americans become aware of their sodium intake. If anyone reading this would like to read the article about salt, it can be found at: http://www.dailyherald.com/health/story.asp?id=38989.
Today I decided to read the Daily Herald and because of my profession, I decided to take a look at the health and fitness section of the paper. The article that caught my eye was about a research that had started in the 1960s. It was about the total consumption of salt intake which americans take daily and it was advising "It's not that salt is horrible and salt kills," they said. "A little bit of salt makes food better, makes life better. But people have to recognize that in large amounts, salt can have damage."
In the research it showed how by watching your salt intake and eating out less, not only will you save money, but your chance of having a heart attack or stroke could be decreased up to twenty-three percent! In my family, we have a high risk for heart attacks from both sides of my family. So I took this article personally. I actually eat out a lot, and one of the things that they advised was to eat at restrauants less and eat homemade meals more often. I really love salt, and I now know that I should start changing my diet, or at least the types of foods I eat and how much salt I take in. I think that this writer did a great job at convincing me to watch my intake.
This writer did an awesome job. Which is probably why they are in the Daily Herald. Comparing to the other articles that I read, I was more personally related to the salt precaution article. But as for the style of writing, I think that this writer was more laid back and instead of strongly stating their opinion, this writer just informed the reader and advised them not to intake as much salt. The two articles were organized well and very well written. I think that this article was meant to provoke thought and give information to help more americans become aware of their sodium intake. If anyone reading this would like to read the article about salt, it can be found at: http://www.dailyherald.com/health/story.asp?id=38989.
Friday, October 06, 2006
Journal 7
Today I have to write about an article that I read for my English class. It was called "I would rather smoke than kiss."
I thought this article was disgusting. Although she would call me a typical american who would rather prolong life than savor it, I really dont believe that smoking is savoring it. It may be fun at first, but smoking takes you prisoner really quick. She doesn't care if she stinks, or even care that she is losing health. She calls us something like health freaks, but its more like a smart and strong choice you have to make. I admire those who try so hard to quit and succeed, they have more strength than a lot of us. But I also admire those who just see the results and decide not to smoke. Personally, I see this kind of stuff a lot where I work. At the hospital, I see people who suffer the worst pains and health problems from smoking. I also see kids who suffer at an age of two and up and it is sad. Some parents decide that it is best not to smoke, but some parents display a feeling of, I just plain don't care. After reading this article, I was confirmed about these feelings, and I am really disgusted. There really are different kinds of people out there, and I think that different is good, but it is sad that they are different enough to not care for others, or even themselves. One reply that astonished me was when she was offered to go to dinner but as long as she could hold from smoking in their home for a little, and she said "go yourself!" And now she is mad at the woman for calling her the rudest person she ever met.
I know that there are many people out there that smoke, but are the coolest people. I have some friends that are like that. But it hurts me to see them suffer and fall victim to these sadistic villains. I really was sickened by this article, I can't believe that people would think in a way that they would rather lay as prisoners to cigarettes, than love their life and everything that should be precious in it.
I thought this article was disgusting. Although she would call me a typical american who would rather prolong life than savor it, I really dont believe that smoking is savoring it. It may be fun at first, but smoking takes you prisoner really quick. She doesn't care if she stinks, or even care that she is losing health. She calls us something like health freaks, but its more like a smart and strong choice you have to make. I admire those who try so hard to quit and succeed, they have more strength than a lot of us. But I also admire those who just see the results and decide not to smoke. Personally, I see this kind of stuff a lot where I work. At the hospital, I see people who suffer the worst pains and health problems from smoking. I also see kids who suffer at an age of two and up and it is sad. Some parents decide that it is best not to smoke, but some parents display a feeling of, I just plain don't care. After reading this article, I was confirmed about these feelings, and I am really disgusted. There really are different kinds of people out there, and I think that different is good, but it is sad that they are different enough to not care for others, or even themselves. One reply that astonished me was when she was offered to go to dinner but as long as she could hold from smoking in their home for a little, and she said "go yourself!" And now she is mad at the woman for calling her the rudest person she ever met.
I know that there are many people out there that smoke, but are the coolest people. I have some friends that are like that. But it hurts me to see them suffer and fall victim to these sadistic villains. I really was sickened by this article, I can't believe that people would think in a way that they would rather lay as prisoners to cigarettes, than love their life and everything that should be precious in it.
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